The story of my Life
I like this.
i laways wanted to be a firstie-guess i try harder.Silence needs to be dealt with always.
hope you r okay.
Always helps to talk or if not write, which did you do?
and now you can speak...
I love the simplicity of it. Simple and beautiful.
as always its a good poem!
Silence..nothing as good
2nd line brother poet...haute is not a word that can be mad into a past tense within the context of the line...although it would be interesting to make the word haute fit within the structure of the entire piece...you can do it and add a layer of meaning or...change it to haunted.Personally I would play with the structure until I could get to haute...adj.Fashionably elegant:
"i gave it a voice...and now this silence haunts me no more"- i like!I love the simplicity of this poem and it reminds me that silence is golden but it can be a lot to bear sometimes. I gave silence a voice and that brought me to the world of poetry!How are you doing btw?x
Sometimes we all need to give silence a voice. Speak up on our own behalf and let our voices be heard. If we don't, who will?
@the walking man :i have done the correction thank you.i have written many Editions to this poem-looking for ways i can add some meat to it,but it seems like the message it holds should be kept simple and precise.i need ideas
@Carsozy writing does the trick for me.
@The poets voice ~~~ Nver been better.
i think silence is a voice of its own, but as usual my dear it is beautiful, soulful and sad, i be sad these days so it gets to me more... thanks for reading, i couldnt make it shorteer
hmm interesting as usual!!!
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