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Monday, August 3, 2009

Silence (Revised Edition)



My Silence,
haunted me-
My silence,
had Noises-
so i gave it a mouth-
i gave it a voice.
Now,
Silence has a life;
Now silence
haunts me no more.

16 comments:

deonte' k said...

I like this.

Moze said...

i laways wanted to be a firstie-guess i try harder.
Silence needs to be dealt with always.

Moze said...

hope you r okay.

Carsozy said...

Always helps to talk or if not write, which did you do?

Angel said...

and now you can speak...

Mudamuli said...

I love the simplicity of it. Simple and beautiful.

K said...

as always its a good poem!

Ugandan girl said...

Silence..nothing as good

the walking man said...

2nd line brother poet...haute is not a word that can be mad into a past tense within the context of the line...although it would be interesting to make the word haute fit within the structure of the entire piece...you can do it and add a layer of meaning or...change it to haunted.

Personally I would play with the structure until I could get to haute...adj.
Fashionably elegant:

The poets voice ~~~ said...

"i gave it a voice...and now this silence haunts me no more"- i like!
I love the simplicity of this poem and it reminds me that silence is golden but it can be a lot to bear sometimes. I gave silence a voice and that brought me to the world of poetry!
How are you doing btw?x

Jackie E. said...

Sometimes we all need to give silence a voice. Speak up on our own behalf and let our voices be heard. If we don't, who will?

Robyn said...

@the walking man :i have done the correction thank you.i have written many Editions to this poem-looking for ways i can add some meat to it,but it seems like the message it holds should be kept simple and precise.
i need ideas

Robyn said...

@Carsozy writing does the trick for me.

Robyn said...

@The poets voice ~~~ Nver been better.

lulu said...

i think silence is a voice of its own, but as usual my dear it is beautiful, soulful and sad, i be sad these days so it gets to me more... thanks for reading, i couldnt make it shorteer

τreciä said...

hmm interesting as usual!!!

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