2nd line brother poet...haute is not a word that can be mad into a past tense within the context of the line...although it would be interesting to make the word haute fit within the structure of the entire piece...you can do it and add a layer of meaning or...change it to haunted.
Personally I would play with the structure until I could get to haute...adj. Fashionably elegant:
"i gave it a voice...and now this silence haunts me no more"- i like! I love the simplicity of this poem and it reminds me that silence is golden but it can be a lot to bear sometimes. I gave silence a voice and that brought me to the world of poetry! How are you doing btw?x
@the walking man :i have done the correction thank you.i have written many Editions to this poem-looking for ways i can add some meat to it,but it seems like the message it holds should be kept simple and precise. i need ideas
i think silence is a voice of its own, but as usual my dear it is beautiful, soulful and sad, i be sad these days so it gets to me more... thanks for reading, i couldnt make it shorteer
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Silence needs to be dealt with always.
Personally I would play with the structure until I could get to haute...adj.
Fashionably elegant:
I love the simplicity of this poem and it reminds me that silence is golden but it can be a lot to bear sometimes. I gave silence a voice and that brought me to the world of poetry!
How are you doing btw?x
i need ideas